Friday, 8 November 2013

I come from

I come from

I come from the town
Where brothers eat chips while they walk
A darkened street and a harsh frown
A lighted room and the flashing TV
I come from roast
On sunday
And curry on monday
I come from cold winter nights
West ham wooly hats
And warm gloves
I come from hot summer weeks
Lying in the garden
With a drink in one hand
and a gun in another
I come from the town
The town I call home

Reflective commentary

In my poem i wanted to create a picture of simplicity and happiness however at the same time containing an underlayer of society as it can be, dark. As we all know there is no such thing as a utopian society and here i tried to express this point. I first went for the light feel. I used words like 'lighted' to portray this. People associate ther light with whats good in this world. Many are scared of the darkness. Which is why i contradicted this in the previous line 'a darkened street', through using these two i believe that i have managed to show that there are two sides to society. I used traditions such as 'roast on sunday', this is one of the features that great britain is famous for, sunday roast. And for me is a part of my childhood. It creates a sense of nostalgia for the reader. I used the line 'gun in another', this i hope would interest some readers and confuse them. It is meant to do this because what i actually mean by gun is a water gun however the fact that i just used 'gun' is me trying to show the underlying dangers of society, and in this case, 'the town'. It also links to the various action films i like to watch, such as the old mafia films where you see someone with a gun in one hand and a drink in the other. It was done to create a dramatic feel. I organized my poem all in one stanza. This is to refer to the dcontinuity of life and how it all comes together, beggining to end.

1 comment:

  1. Like your use of contrasts in your poem! Agree with your sense of nostalgia created-ideas effectively integrated- good writing!

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